my name Is Laura and I have my CPE exam on March 11th. I saw on your blog that we can send you our writings so I'm sending you some essays because I'm not very confident with my writing skills, I think it's going to be my lowest mark on the exam.
Thank you very much,
Laura Lopez
DISCURSIVE ESSAY- film industry
Question
Read the two texts below:
Write an essay summarising and
evaluating the key points from both texts. Use your own words throughout as far
as possible, and include your own idea in your answer.
Write your answer in 240-280
words
Movie Magic
It has often been claimed that people flock to the cinema primarily to escape
from the boredom, or sometimes even the misery of their everyday lives.
Remarkable technological advances have made the experience of watching a movie
ever more magical and emotionally powerful, increasing the appeal and impact of
the cinema for each new generation. Yet movies have a power that goes far
beyond their capacity to transport us to another world, since they can
influence audiences to change their attitudes or behaviour in significant ways,
making them consider complex moral and social issues such as war, poverty, and
prejudice.
Is the cinema in decline?
The inescapable truth is that the cinema, one of the greatest cultural
achievements of the twentieth century, has reached a new low point in recent
years. All but a few movies are, frankly, not worth anyone’s valuable time.
Audiences are increasingly presented with childish comedies, predictable action
films and disappointing sequels. There is also the absurd idea that a film with
an inflated budget of millions is a substitute for a well-acted, imaginative
and original film. Film studios now spend almost as much money on marketing
their films as producing them, which tends to suggest their concern is with
profit rather than quality.
(essay)
DISCURSIVE
ESSAY- film industry
Many are
those who have enjoyed the pleasures that come from watching a formidable
movie, yet there are times when disappointment is all you experience when
coming out of the cinema. It is undoubtedly a matter of opinion and taste. So,
is it true that the industry of movie making is going downhill? (Introductory paragraph)
On the one
hand, there are those who believe film studios are only concerned about profit
rather than quality, and they may be right. Multimillionaire companies such as Paramount
On the
other hand, as I have mentioned earlier, it is all really up to your personal
taste, and since everybody is different when it comes to preferences, it is rather
complicated to give an objective statement. Instead, we should consider what
movies actually offer us: whether it is entertainment and evasion, or deeper
meanings and moral issues; Not only do movies have the ability to transport us to
another world, but also to make us think, to influence us, so the variety of
films allows them to appeal to all kinds of people. (Second paragraph should make reference to text two. Both paragraphs should ideally have the same number of lines. This seems rather shorter than the other.)
All in all,
it really is a complicated matter to discuss, as it is subjective and personal.
That said, I really think movies are, and have always been, one of the best
ways of transmitting a message, as well as being one of man's great
entertainment and I am sure they will continue to delight and fascinate us for
generations to come.
Words: 341
Feedback:
Dear Laura, first of all the text is too long.
The grammar and vocabulary are ok/good. Congrats on that.
But I think it is important to follow some order:
-Introduction
-Paragraph about text 1
-Paragraph about text 2
-Conclusion
Ah, and PS: Write a title !
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