Hello Gustavo,
I'm attaching my report so that it could be checked (if it's possible).
Kind regards,
Xenia
Task
Type: Report
Question:
A delegation of foreign students is planning a trip to your country.
As a student, you have been asked to write a report on the system of
education in your country as background information for their visit.
Write your report (300-350 words), including your opinion of the
advantages and disadvantages of the system
Report on...( write a title!)
Introduction
The
purpose of this report is to describe the system of education in
Russia. The report will comment on advantages and disadvantages of
the system.
Details
The
education system in Russia includes 11 years at of school, 9 of which
are obligatory. so After finishing the 9th
form grade, one can continue studying at college.
The higher education
system has changed over the years (how?), and it tends to be similar to the
European one where you get a Bachelor degree after 4 years of study
and then can proceed by to doing a Master’s degree, which will take
you another 2 years. (Feedback: the heading is "details" but it seems very general)
Advantages
of the system
In
general, such a system has proven to be quite effective as years at
school allow you to study thoroughly, paying attention to details and
going deeper into something you are interested in. Moreover, there
are only two obligatory examinations schoolchildren have to take when
they finish school, which makes things not so complicated. Also, the
results of the exams are accepted by both school and university, so
no one has to take them twice.
Disadvantages
Despite
so many pros, there are still certain things that seem to be
problems. For example, the load at school might be unbearable for
schoolchildren under 10, some complain (who?) about the number of
assignments and their difficulty, which results in the lack of free
time and children being inactive. Final state exams are claimed to
test much deeper knowledge than that you can get by just attending
classes. Because of it, parents spend large amounts of money on
private tutors for their sons and daughters with no result
guaranteed.
The
competition for a place at universities is stiff and there are fewer
and fewer free places every year, as a consequence, it turns into
kind of a rat race.
Conclusion
Although
the education system in Russia has already changed to a certain
extent, there are still things to be improved. Personally, I think
the number of exams could be reduced, while the quantity of free
places in universities might be increased, so that everyone could
study something he or she really aims for.
Feedback: This writing can be largely improved, especially in terms of content. To me, there is a lot of important information that missing. I want to know for example if the education in Russia is free, if boys and girls study together or have the same opportunities, if childen learn other languages, if the school prepare young people to find good jobs...etc
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