I have found your site on the web and would like to thank you for its beneficial and useful content.
My name is Anuta Koval. I am 23 years old. In May 2018 I am going to take CPE. Please read and correct my piece of writing on man and music.
I will greatly appreciate any comments.
Looking forward to hearing from you soon,
Anuta
Men and the Music
In this essay I make an attempt to summarize and
evaluate two texts, which cast light upon the beneficial sides of music making
and the idea of introducing music to the school curriculum.
In the second text “Music in Schools?” two questions
are analysed as well. Initially, the author lists advantages of making music. I
see eye to eye with him. Mastering the art of playing the piano or the violin
is a right and sure way to train IQ, improve memory, coordination and
concentration, to widen your worldview. The debate of what kind of music should
be taught at schools follows. I’d love to support the author of the text and
vote for classical music. A treasure box of sheer beauty, it is a compendium of
the finest melodies and harmonies throughout the Ages.
Ultimately, I am of the opinion that music plays a vital role in human
development, especially in formative years. Therefore, everyone should be given
a chance to become involved in this multifaceted art.
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Dear Anuta, with the exception of a couple of commas or a word that missed an "s", I found your essay fantastic.
Well done!
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