CPE Essay Sample and Correction

Dear Gustavo

kindly read my essay for CPE .Thanks.

Eliza Fernandez

Genetic engineering

Over the past few decades science and technology have changed every aspect of life . However in medical science it’s its evidence is even more transparent for the recent research innovated a process called genetic engineering that eventually makes way for unnatural birth for the first time on earth. (Feedback: Is the introduction clear? By reading the introduction, does the reader have a clear idea of what your are goint to write about?)

Letter to the Editor Sample CPE exam 2017

Good morning Gustavo, I have read in your blog that you offer yourself to correct CPE writings I have decided to send you one so you could give me some comments and feedback in respect.

Thank you,

Clara Grau

You read this comment recently in a literary magazine about a book you enjoyed reading. “The author’s use of language to build up atmosphere and to give insights into the characters’ thoughts and emotions is not as effective as it could be. This was a disappointing aspect of the book”. You disagree and decide to write a letter to the magazine, expressing your opinion. Write between 280 and 320 words.

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to you because I disagree with a comment posted in your last week’s magazine issue about the last novel of Sarah Nuttall, and I would like to give my opinion in respect to it. For the past two months, I have been experiencing a tough time due to family problems and it has been very difficult to me to find something to entertain myself with and give me the necessary energy to keep going. However, this changed last week, when I started reading the book I mentioned before (name of the book).

The novel is based on a real case and tells the story of a young woman whose family dies in a plane crash and has to get through this horrible situation all alone. Despite seeming a drama at the very beginning, you soon begin to realize that the last thing she is going to do is giving up. Thanks to the simplicity of the author’s language, the reader is able to get an idea of her feelings and take her place to understand the emptiness she is experiencing. (You "entertain yourself" reading about a plane crash? )

Contrarily to what superreader expresses in his comment, I believe that Nuttall achieves to perfectly describe the thoughts of the main character and her disorientation after the tragedy. Although it is true that she does not use a very detailed and descriptive vocabulary referring to emotions, this is perfectly understandable to me because, by doing this, she avoids an overdose of sentimentalism and allows the reader to imagine by his own.

Being always in favour of the freedom of speech and opinion, I think it is positive to see that your impression of a book can differ substantially from the one of another reader. Nevertheless, to help your readers decide whether to buy it or not, I would like to recommend you that you include including more than one opinion for every single work you talk about book that is discussed.

Yours faithfully,

Clara Grau

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Regards,

Sara Muñoz

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INSTRUCTIONS

Write an essay discussing two of the methods in your notes. You should explain which method you think is more important for governments to consider, and provide reasons to support your opinion.

Methods of minimising the use of fossil fuels

Recycling

Increasing taxes of petrol

Increasing the number of nuclear energy

Some opinions expressed in the discussion

‘Is the technology for recycling adequatedly developed?’

‘Increased taxation will not be a sufficient deterrent’

‘Nuclear energy is too risky’

How fossil fuels should be limited?

The impact of fossil fuels in our society has rencently been discussed the question of the impact that fossil fuels have had in our society. ( Feedback: where? by who? why? )In this essay I will put forward some ideas to cut down the use of these nonrenewable energies.(Why should we cut them down?)

The most important point to outline is the recycling technique. As more and more people are becoming aware of the consequences in the environment resulted from their actions, it has led to a more responsible behaviour. However, some people have expressed their worries regarding the question of the suitability of technology to deal with this matter. Despite the fact that technology plays an important role in minimising some disposals, it is uncertain the ways in which technology is reduced.

Turning to a different point, the traditional appeal to rise the prices of petrol has resulted in being inefficent at preventing people form using their vehicles. Whereas, people should be rewarded for undertaking mesuarements that contribute to preserve our environment. It would be advisable not only punishing people for using fossil fuels, but also rewarding people who opt for other sources of energy such as electricity or gas. This is in my opinion the most important point for government to consider as it wil led to a considerable improvement in the fight against pollution.

The outcome is clear that as long as the government take care of these implementations (re-check), it will result in enormous advances in our society and a meaninful change as well. (Re-think and re-write the conclusion. )

CPE Essay Sample 2017

Hello!

I'm not sure that you still do the free writings corrections but in case you do, I would like to send one of my practice essays for CPE (Writing Task 1).

Thank you in advance!

Regards,

Olga

Task?

1. Even in our information-rich digital age, when there are diverse ways of occupying our leisure time, museums continue to play a fundamental role in society. Over the last decade in particular, museums have become more community-orientated, and the majority seek to be inclusive rather than elitist, reaching out to everyone. This change of heart has necessitated a degree of creativity in the presentation of information. Objects rarely ‘speak for themselves’ and, where a low reading age must often be assumed, museum curators have looked to modern technology to breathe more life into exhibits, whether through interactive techniques, or accompanying audio-visual effects. 2. The purpose of museum is to stimulate learning and broaden the horizons of its visitors, yet many museums nowadays appear to neglect this responsibility in an attempt to entertain rather than educate. The dumbing down of exhibitions is widespread – in short, the medium has become more important than the message. Learning is all too often compromised by technological wizardry, which may impress on a superficial level but essentially trivialises, and provides a content-lite ‘experience’. Whether this is in response to government cuts or merely reflects a trend among museum directors, it is undoubtedly a change for the worse.

Do museums benefit from modern technology?

In our technologically advanced age progress finds its way into many areas including such traditional ones as museums. But do museums benefit from the incorporation of technology? Or does technology threatens to destroy the very essence of what museums are? The two extracts express contrasting views on this issue.

The first text stresses that although we live in a digital era and therefore have access to a large variety of information sources, museums still remain an important part in people’s lives. Furthermore, in recent years efforts have been made to make museums more understandable and accessible to everyone. Some of the said efforts include extensive use of modern technology in order to make the whole museum experience more fascinating to the general public.

Conversely, the second passage makes a point that the paramount aim of museums is to educate people. It argues against integrating modern technology into exhibitions, claiming that instead of contributing to more effective delivery of their message it becomes too much of an end in itself. Museums are becoming more entertaining but the knowledge they give is increasingly perfunctory.

There is little to disagree with in the first text. Museums still play a significant role in our life and there is no doubt that trying to make them more attractive is a very  reasonable and commendable course of action. The second text is somewhat more controversial but mostly I agree with the author’s point of view. Despite their good intentions, museum curators often get carried away with the exciting opportunities the modern technology provides and as a result exhibits turn into meaningless trinkets which attract attention but have no educational value whatsoever.

To sum up, it is important to move with the times and incorporate new technologies but the real aim of museums should by no means be forgotten.

Feedback: The text is well organised and you have summarised both texts. But, what does the task say? Only summarise? Or you have to give your opinions as well? 

CPE Writing practice. Restaurant Review

Dear Gustavo

My name is Kate. I'm on the way to my CPE exam in June and saw your ad about sample writing corrected for free.

I'd like to send you my review of a restaurant. I might as well send you more because I know from my own experience how badly you need to read some samples sometimes when you prepare for your exam.

Hope you like it!

Regards,

Katerina Katabi

Restaurant review Chester

There are a number of restaurants, bars and cafes in our city which cater for different tastes of their guests. But there is one that stands out for its unique atmosphere and an excellent service. (Which one??? ) Even though it has recently opened, it became an immediate success, so to avoid any disappointment the reservation has to be made well in advance. (Recommendations maybe at the end, not in the intro)

The first thing that strikes you as you enter the place is the interior created by a famous and trendy designer. A former industrial loft converted into a restaurant may appear inappropriate for making the dining experience pleasant. On the contrary, it adds to exquisite atmosphere and genteel ambience of the restaurant. In fact, it’s the tasteful design and flawless surroundings that attract visitors here in the first place.

However, the atmosphere would count for nothing if the quality of the service and the selection of food and wine were poor. (But which food? which wine??? )A highly welcoming staff of hostesses and waiters will make you feel at home and be readily at your disposal for any request or query. It gives you a warm feeling compared to the disdainful glances of the staff in other restaurants as they immediately start to look down on you if all you want to order is a cup of coffee. (Try to follow an order. This paragraph about the food and the next about the staff).

As soon as the menu is served you can spend a good half an hour going through its pages. It does spoil for choice even the fussiest eater. No matter what diet you are keeping – vegetarian, kosher, gluten-free and so on – you’ll invariably find something delectable to your taste. Salads and main courses come from different cuisines and are made of luxury ingredients. Desserts, in the highly unlikely event you have room for them, are done to perfection and are simply heavenly. The only complaint is the winelist, otherwise quite good, but it does not list vintages and seem to be a bit over-priced. To compensate for that the restaurant has its own brewery and offers a real bargain for different kinds of beers.

Just when you think your night out couldn’t be better, a mellow piano music will please your ear and take you on a romantic journey to classic jazz and blues of the 1930s. Most probably that will be the ultimate reason why you would want to come back. Though experienced in going to restaurants I may be, Chester is easily the best place I’ve been to in years. Not only did it live up to my expectations, but exceeded them. A chance to have quality time out with your family or friends and a marvelous dining experience in Chester is not to be missed. (Is this the conclusion? This is too long)

CPE Essay sample 2017 free feedback and writing correction

Dear Gustavo
Please correct my writing for CPE.

Eliza Fernandez

MEDIA AND INTRUSION

Everybody will agree to the point that over the past few years the extent of intrusion of the media has made into the private lives of individuals is unblustering for they are subsequently facing denigration to their right of privacy increased. The media has deviated from the informative role it once played in finding people important news on papers or containing useful information one sought all these have been mitigated since media and has engaged itself more into publishing facts and information related to private lives of famous individuals . How come the issue does not concern us ? (Feedback: Introduction hast to be short and to the point).

In most part the media is constantly tying up with the sort of news demanded from public part in that falls a section of people interested to stay tuned up with daily updates coming from glamour world which at large focus on the life of celebrities, film stars, directors politicians and the day to day gossips they pass on to media. In some cases, it becomes more serious when media stalk them and even paparazzize them only to add more publicity to their channels. Furthermore, flashing those sensitive issues like death, personal loss, crimes ,war or moments of major humanitarian crisis under the title of “ Breaking News” on tv screen is an evidence of media’s money making formula devised only to shaming the society. (Too many words. Go straight to the point. Task says: Outline the problems the media causes and how they affect the individual)

It is not expected from media to continue meddling with the personal life of people without their consent. I strongly agree that not only media but people are also responsible for encouraging media to interfere; for they want to dig more into others’ lives. In my belief, law has little to do to stop media’s outrageous nature therefore, common people have to come forward to protest against the arbitery nature long sustained by media. In addition, I opine that offenders committing crimes like paparazzi, stalking should be harshly punished. Last but not least, people should learn to adopt a more sympathetic and moral outlook towards those in grief.