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Jose Arredondo
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The way in which we
eat has been is constantly (dramatically) changing, meaning that those old-fashion
dinners where all the family would come along together and share a
nice and comfy meal are prompt to disappear. Feedback: Careful with the use of "old-fashion". It has a negative connotation and it sounds like you are saying "I hate having dinner with my family, I think it is an old tradition that has to end".
The first text aims
for all the positive aspects of eating together whereas the second
one addresses the harsh reality in which already prepared food seems
to be the best option, since it is quick and easy to make. Feedback: For a paragraph, it is too short. Add a couple of lines more.
Sharing a good time
with family and friends while eating can boost one’s self-esteem
and is considered to be a healthy habit. It is as well an excuse to
get to know better your relatives, resulting in a better environment
at home. As I see it, the rising unpopularity of these fancy
arrangements may be the cause of the current devalue of such
important terms as family. Moreover, convenience food is regarded as
artificial and one from which our health may not benefit. It has also
been doubted how edible this meals really are, due to the amount of
chemical and non-natural additives. (Feedback: If you started the last paragraph with "The first text...", then do the same here and start: "The second text...")
In the past, food
would play a major role and was connected in a more profound level to
cultural belongings, prove to this is the fact that gastronomy
remains as a huge aspect for tourism.
Nowadays, relying on
just a few minutes to eat; fast-food and already prepared meals are
being widely spread. I would like to believe it is not as much our
fault, but are one’s strict timetables and jobs to blame for this
situation. (Feedback: It is a little too long for a conclusion. Try to use one of the typical phrases to conclude an essay).
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