CPE Report 2019 The healthcare system in Spain

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The healthcare system in Spain

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Introduction

The aim of the report is to analyse the current situation of the healthcare system in Spain, outlining the positive and negative points, as well as to stating to provide recommendations that could on how to make some improvement. 

Current situation

It could be said that the healthcare in Spain is among the best ones around the world, despite of the problems that we all could have in mind. (Which ones? We are not in Spain) In order to have a better understanding of it, I have done (better in passive voice: a survey was carried out...) a survey to different players related to healthcare (players?? check!) such as pacients patients, medical proffesionals, material suppliers and pharmacies.

Seldom have they mentioned (why present perfect? check grammar) positive points to be outlined, but the few ones are the basis of the whole system:

·    - The attention is free and guaranted to all the patients.

·   - The medical proffesionals are considered very well prepared and skillful, with a great experience in the field.

·    - The machinery and equipments (uncountable) in use are brand new, featuring updated capabilities.

These are great positive remarks, albeit there are well-known negative points that were outlined: 

      -Waiting time to be attended is longer than it should be. Even more for operations rather diagnosis. (check grammar)

·    -Instalations Facilities are old and a renewal is becoming a must

·   -The payment terms among the different partners (public entities to suppliers and to pharmacies) are too long.

Measures for improvement

The adjusted budget of the public entity determines that more proffesionals, better instalations facilities and more fluent payments is hardly to be assumed at the same time. (check grammar)

However, the possibility of co-payment in order to reduce the level of overcrowding will give a release on the waiting lists and could be a plus to enhance the payment terms in the supply chain.

Conclusion

Bearing in mind all the points detailed, we could say (why in conditional?) we have a great healthcare system, whereas (check the use of whereas) some improvements need to be done to keep it in the upper part of the world ranking.

In my opinion, the co-payment recommendation would be a good starting point to solve this  tangled situation.

Rodrigo