Wednesday, 12 June 2019

CPE Exam 2019 Sample Report


The following text was submitted by Flora. I have added some comments in red as feedback. Unfortunately, without the task or a photo of the task, it is very difficult for me to provive more accurate and detailed feedback. 

I hope it helps anyways!

International Film Club Report 2018-2019

 (An introduction is missing)

Events (Last year's events, better?)
Reminiscing on the International Film Club’s (IFC) past year (change or eliminate), the club’s "Italian film weekend", which was held in February, proved to be a great success with many members expressing their encouragement. This leads (past tense?) the club’s board to give consideration to a recurrence of the popular event in the year of 2020. Furthermore, the annual dinner with this year’s special guest John Favreau held at the Shoreditch Hotel was a well-attended success (change) as ever.

Future plans
In the year of 2019-2020, IFC is determined to bring even more interesting cinematic insights to its esteemed members. Not only can the board confirm it has recently tied down director Anthony Russo for a lecture on suspense in blockbusters (scheduled to be held in December 2019 at the club’s headquarters in London), but it can also corroborate new plans of an advanced video library. IFC members will be enabled to consult this database at the club’s headquarters as well as at our website. (In general some sentences are too long)

Finances
This year’s earnings consists of (check "consist of")) the contribution of 32 fresh members and the generous £30,000 grant from the National Film Association. This adds up to an income of £38,000. All outgoing expenses this year comprise the renting of films and the purchase of new stationery, such as a suitable film projector and the furnishing of the recently procured meeting room. These cost £20,100. This leaves us with a rough grand total of £20,700 to spend on the organisation of further club meetings. Everything taken into account, the International Film Club will be faring well in the year of 2019-2020.

(A conclusion is missing)

Thursday, 11 April 2019

CPE Sample on Consumerism und Evolving Technology


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CONSUMERISM AND EVOLVING TECHNOLOGY


The first text points out the great deal of stuff being thrown away every week; as a matter of fact, Both governments and private citizens are trying to do their best to enhance recycling. This line of reasoning should not make us safe and thoroughly We should not be so proud though, insofar as this seems not to be enough to prevent situations like marine life from being irreversibly endangered. (Re-write + Add a couple of lines including personal opinion)

Friday, 22 March 2019

CPE Article on Gap Year

Hi everybody ! I received this Article Sample from Debora. I post it here with some feedback.
Unfortunately, I have to say I have some issues with it. To me it looks more like a job advertisement than an article. I would stronly suggest making changes. Take a look and feel free to provide your own feedback !
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Question: You have been asked to write an article for Job Prospects magazine, a publication for 18-30 year olds, on the following topic:
How taking a gap year* can enhance your career prospects.
You should focus on the types of job and leisure opportunities for young people taking a gap year in your country (or a country that you know well), the types of skills that can be gained and the likely value of these to potential employers.

Write the article for the readers of the magazine. (around 280 - 320 words)


Take a gap year and boost your career prospects

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A gap year is a chance to figure yourself out, get in contact with alternative ways of life and enhance your skills. Besides, more than ever employers are seeking for talents beyond the knowledge itself. (What do you mean?) Having this experience will put yourself in an unknown situation every day, strengthening your decision-making capabilities. It will present you with the chance to become a better version of yourself! It doesn’t matter if your gap year is just before college or in mid-jobs; there is always room for improving old habits and creating good new ones.

Wednesday, 6 March 2019

CPE Essay on Zoos Sample writing


Here there is a sample writing sent by Elena. My feedback is in red.


Essay on Zoos


Resultado de imagen de zooNowadays it is widely acknowledged how much it is important it is to protect and study endangered species. Which better way to do it than keeping animals in zoos? But to which extent do zoos really represent a salvation for those animals? (Suggestion: Use more adjectives like "utterly important")

Tuesday, 5 March 2019

CPE Essay on Youth Culture


Essay
The following essay was submitted by John, from the Neatherlands. A couple of small corrections can be found in colour red.



Essay on Youth Culture 


The term ‘youth culture’ found its name in the 1960s. Young people changed their views on several aspects of daily life. There are also people who have tried to figure out what ‘youth culture’ involves. Both texts emphasizes style and innovations.

Bad Restaurant Review

Hello everybody. I received this "Bad Restaurant Review" from Alberto, who is studying for the Oficial School of Languages C2 English exam in Spain. I have posted his writing with some feedback in red. In general I think there are some positive points in his document like organising the text into paragraphs and addressing different aspects (location, service, quality of food,...) but some improvement needs to be done: the vocabulary is from B2/C1, not C2 and the style is rather informal and aggressive.



Bad restaurant review.

Resultado de imagen de bad restaurant

Yesterday I had the unpleasant experience of attending to one of the most overrated restaurants on the coast of Valencia. The name Its name, should you know, is “Els pins” and it is located on a kind of waste land which they have the audacity to call landscape. (In my opinion a little too aggressive. Check if  the use of "attend to" is correct).

Once inside, you are greeted with the most distasteful furniture. The tables and chairs are simply dreadful and as for the table cloths there is only one thing to be said and is that they are made of paper. There is no doubt that in this establishment, functionality is more important than any kind of style. (Once again a little too harsh, which makes it sound childish/unprofessional to me, like written by an angry teenager)

The service is the sort one that one would expect form a fast food chain, but without its speed and simplicity. The waitresses (all females) were more concerned about how they looked rather than who to look. It seemed like a competition and the one to take the longest time attending a table was the winner. ("who to look" not clear what you mean)

After having endured all this nonsense, the thought of enjoying a good meal seemed to me impossible, this is when things turned really interesting. We ordered the infamous dish paella, we thought, what can go wrong? after all, we are in Valencia birth place of rice dishes in Spain. What it was presented to us was an unrecognisable mash of what seemed to be a mixture of rice vegetables and a lonely chicken breast. At this point I had to convince myself into trying it. You know when they say, trust your first instincts. Well, I should have followed that advice. The moment I put the spoon into my mouth it felt like an explosion. It was as spicy as a Tabasco soup. (Even thought it is a negative review, you could try softening it and making it more respectful. Also, the use of "you know" and the use of questions, make it very informal, and I don't know if this is a good idea).

At this time, I had enough of this torture and asked for the check. To my surprise the previously deceptive waitresses came alive and rushed with the check as if their life depended on it.  I won´t comment on the price because whoever pays to be taken for a fool deserves to be one. Never again will I lay eyes on this sorry excuse of a restaurant. It is banned from my list and so it should be from anyone´s.
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