Thursday, 11 October 2018

CPE Writing Exam Part 1 Essay Sample

Hello Gustavo:I have also made an essay taking this example and I would really appreciate if you could check it and let me know if I am getting closer to doing one properly. I know it´s too long(I have to work on this issue) but I hope there are not that many mistakes...thanks a loooot.
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Raising the Bar or School Sports
The National Sports Academy is running a series of workshops aimed at encouraging more teenagers to get involved in sport. The workshops are for teachers and will look at how to promote the numerous benefits of physical exercise and team sports to school pupils. 'Exercise helps to maintain a stable weight, strengthen bones and reduces the risk of stress-related illnesses.' explained Tim Collins, the Academy Director. 'Aside from health benefits taking part in competitive sports gives teenagers a chance to experience the highs and lows of a competition, as well as instilling discipline, responsibility and commitment - all valuable life skills.'

Sport Seen as Uncool
teenagers are spending less time on physical exercise because they find it deeply 'uncool', according to a survey of teachers and pupils. The problem is most prevalent amongst older teenagers. Girls are uncomfortable about sharing sports classes with boys and avoid swimming lessons because of a fear that it will spoil their hairstyles. And both sexes were scathing in the survey about the unfashionable PE uniform that had to be worn. The choice of sports available was also too limited. Teachers said they would like to see codes for sports kits relaxed, single sex physical education classes and a wider range of activities to combat the decline in activity.
Write the essay. (around 240 - 280 words)


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DIFFICULT TIMES FOR SPORTS AT SCHOOLS


Sports at school seem to be unappealing for most of teenagers at this day and age. This essay will explore into summarise and discuss two texts whose concern is how to make them young feel attracted to it and explore why they aren´t. (Keep intro short, 4 lines ideal) 

The first text states that teenagers are less interested in sports nowadays. (Repetitive) For that reason the National Sports Academy promotes workshops for teachers to learn how to develop a taste for sports in young students, pointing both its physical benefits and life skills derived from competition. (Make paragraph longer + add opinion)

The second text, on the other hand, focuses its attention on the reasons that lie behind this unappeal for sports. The main problem seems to be the shyness boys and girls feel when sharing a sports class. They feel self-conscious due to the compulsory uniform or because their looks are going to be spoilt, therefore, they avoid these classes in order to remain fashionable and cool. Teachers have proposed single sex classes and more activities to save the decline of sports 
practice at schools. (Add own comment/opinion)

My opinion is that sports have always been a torture for some people (why?), let alone teenagers who are in constant denial to anything that might be given as a health benefit. (Make this paragraph a conclusion)




Tuesday, 9 October 2018

CAE English level B2 Proposal Sample

Hello Gustavo 
I send you my writing. If there is any problem I would be grateful if you let me know. 

Thanking you in advance, 
Claustre



Writing Paper: Part 2


Task type: Proposal

Question: You work in the sales department of a large company. You have been asked to reply to this memo from the company's Personnel Officer:



Internal Memo


From: Personnel Officer
To: Sales Department

Owing to recent changes within the company we are experiencing some problems with staff motivation. Please write a proposal giving your opinion of the following suggestions for improving staff morale:



  1. A party for the whole department.
  2. A weekend away for the most successful sales team.
  3. A monetary prize for the best salesperson.
I would appreciate any other suggestions.
Write the proposal to the Personnel Officer. (between 220-260 words)


Title??

This proposal is intended to highlight the current problem with staff motivation in our company ang give provide some ideas on how to improve that issue.

STAFF MOTIVATION PROBLEMS
Add a paragraph here and explain what the problem is.

A PARTY FOR A WHOLE DEPARTMENT

I believe that could be a good option to improve relationships between people of different departments and consequently straighten up the link with all members of the company. Nevertheless, in an expensive option (check) although the results might be satisfactoy.

Monday, 24 September 2018

CPE Exam Essay Sample Level C1

Hello Gustavo,

Attached you find an essay written by me. Hopefully you could provide some feedback on it.
I'm looking forward to your comments.

Kind regards,
J. K. from the Netherlands


Resultado de imagen de sport
Writing task:

Question
Read the two texts below.
Write an essay summarising and evaluating the key points from both texts. Use your own words throughout as far as possible and include your own ideas in your answers.
Raising the Bar or School Sports
The National Sports Academy is running a series of workshops aimed at encouraging more teenagers to get involved in sport. The workshops are for teachers and will look at how to promote the numerous benefits of physical exercise and team sports to school pupils. 'Exercise helps to maintain a stable weight, strengthen bones and reduces the risk of stress-related illnesses.' explained Tim Collins, the Academy Director. 'Aside from health benefits taking part in competitive sports gives teenagers a chance to experience the highs and lows of a competition, as well as instilling discipline, responsibility and commitment - all valuable life skills.'


Sport Seen as Uncool
teenagers are spending less time on physical exercise because they find it deeply 'uncool', according to a survey of teachers and pupils. The problem is most prevalent amongst older teenagers. Girls are uncomfortable about sharing sports classes with boys and avoid swimming lessons because of a fear that it will spoil their hairstyles. And both sexes were scathing in the survey about the unfashionable PE uniform that had to be worn. The choice of sports available was also too limited. Teachers said they would like to see codes for sports kits relaxed, single sex physical education classes and a wider range of activities to combat the decline in activity.
Write the essay. (around 240 - 280 words)
Text in blue needs to be checked.
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Title?

It is a well-known fact that sport has a positive impact on our health, physically and mentally. Unfortunately, adolescents are les involved in sporting activities according to both texts. The question is how to encourage these young people to breathe new life into their physical awareness. (What exactly do you mean?)

The focus in text one is on teachers and education. It states that teachers will be trained enabling them to get ideas (on) how to uplift physical activities for teenagers. In my opinion, this should be a task for the government as well because getting this group of people to exercise is a nationwide problem. Barring the physical benefits of sports adolescents also discover the pros and cons of being competitive, disciplined and committed to a challenge which are precious experiences in later life. (Check use of "barring" and punctuation)

Tuesday, 4 September 2018

CPE Jobs Fair Report (Sample and feedback)


Hello Gustavo, This is another piece of writing I worked on. Thanks for your hard work and dedication! 


Writing Task: 

Resultado de imagen de job fair cartoon valenciaA job fair was recently held in your town for international organizations and companies to promote careers available for young people. You have been asked to write a report of the jobs fair for your college website. You should briefly describe the event and identify two or three promotions of particular interest and relevance. You should also evaluate the extent to which such events can open young people’s minds to new challenges and career opportunities. Write your report.

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Jobs fair in Valencia


Introduction
The aim of this report is to provide an overview of the jobs fair held in Valencia, as well as to identify the promotions of more relevance and discuss to what extend events such as this, can benefit students in our college.  

Overview and best promotions
Multiple international organizations met together at the Exhibition Centre last Saturday, September 1. Around 2,000 students from the region attended this annual event. Many programs were launched in this edition, with two of them clearly standing out.

Monday, 3 September 2018

CPE Spain 2018 Writing Sample and feedback


Hello Gustavo, 

First, thanks for sharing such wise information on your blog. I will soon take the English C2 test on writing as it was the only part I failed back in May. I would like this piece of writing to be checked if possible. 


Resultado de imagen de couch potatoWriting task: You have recently read an article from a youth magazine on the problem of inactivity in young people. The magazine has invited its readers to respond to the topic by writing a short article of their own, which answers the following questions:
Why are our young people becoming 'couch potatoes', and what can we do to solve the problem?
And this is my article!
Thanks in advance, N. B

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Millennial’s indoor syndrome” on the verge of becoming the newest disease concern of our time   

(title too long??)

“I have to do something about this. I can only think of playing on-line games and binge-watching the latest released series on Netflix. and I can already acknowledge that my sedentary beacon of living way of life is simply not right”, says Juan Manuel, a 17 year old from Madrid, who was recently diagnosed with severe overweight. Juan Manuel’s unpleasant experience is becoming less anecdotal as health pundits have already raised a red flag alerting of what is been being called “Millennial’s indoor syndrome”.

Thursday, 2 August 2018

Writing a report for the CPE exam. Sample and feedback

Hi Gustavo
Thanks for taking the time to read this, Martina.

Resultado de imagen de jobs fair young people

Writing Task:
A jobs fair was recently held in your town for international organisations and companies to promote careers available for young people. You have been asked to write a report of the jobs fair for your college website. You should briefly describe the event and identify two or three promotions of particular interest and relevance. You should also evaluate the extent to which such events can open young people’s minds to new challenges and career opportunities.
Write your report in 280-320 words.

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(I suggest writing a title)



Introduction:
The aim of this report is to describe a jobs fair that was recently held in our town. As well as, to identifying interesting and relevant promotions made by the companies and organisations; and to evaluateing whether the event opened the youngsters’ minds or not. (who? in what way?)

Description of the event:
For the first time in a while the jobs fair was held in the city. It was at the Town Hall, where there is plenty of space to came out such a big event. (check!) The fair was well-organised; there was a general topic per day, and each there were not only interactive talks and presentations but also some engaging games. The general topics were Physical science, Art, Medicine and Social science. For example, the first day, Physical science, there were stands which presented different projects that were done by students who had finished their career studies.