Saturday, 1 December 2018

CPE Cambridge Exam: Essay on Teenagers


Картинки по запросу teenagers old and young peopleDear Gustavo,I hope you can help me by correcting one of my essays, as I am taking the CPE next week.

Write an essay about the main problems teenagers have in your country. Describe them, and explain their causes and suggest possible solutions.

My answer:

An Opinion Essay (CPE Exam): 

Teenagers in my country


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There are a lot of negative opinions out there, when it comes to the younger generation. Some people claim they are too dependent on technology, as they are often seen spending a lot of time on their smartphones, even sometimes choosing online communication over real one. Additionally, there have been instances cases of older people speaking against teenagers' habit of being too sensitive and taking offence in everything.

Saturday, 10 November 2018

CPE Cambridge Exam. Essay on "The financial cost of stress"

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Dear Gustavo,I hope this email finds you well. My name is José V - I am sitting the CPE in three weeks' time, so I was wondering if you could have a look at my writing task. Massive thanks for your hard work; I have been following your website for a while now and, in all honesty, it is a treasure trove of fantastic materials!


Kind regards,
José V






The Financial cost of Stress

It is an indisputable fact that stress has become a prominent issue in present-day society. People from different demographics claim to suffer from mental unrest on a daily basis; a state of affairs that has led organisations to realise the importance of dealing with it. The two texts discuss the intricacies of the problem alongside some ways in which it can be combatted. (Would prefer a different verb)

Thursday, 11 October 2018

CPE Cambridge Exam: Essay on Sports and Teenagers

Картинки по запросу sport at schoolHello Gustavo:

I have made an essay taking this example and I would really appreciate if you could check it and let me know if I am getting closer to doing one properly. I know it´s too long(I have to work on this issue) but I hope there are not that many mistakes...thanks a lot.

Task


Raising the Bar or School Sports
The National Sports Academy is running a series of workshops aimed at encouraging more teenagers to get involved in sport. The workshops are for teachers and will look at how to promote the numerous benefits of physical exercise and team sports to school pupils. 'Exercise helps to maintain a stable weight, strengthen bones and reduces the risk of stress-related illnesses.' explained Tim Collins, the Academy Director. 'Aside from health benefits taking part in competitive sports gives teenagers a chance to experience the highs and lows of a competition, as well as instilling discipline, responsibility and commitment - all valuable life skills.'


Sport Seen as Uncool
teenagers are spending less time on physical exercise because they find it deeply 'uncool', according to a survey of teachers and pupils. The problem is most prevalent amongst older teenagers. Girls are uncomfortable about sharing sports classes with boys and avoid swimming lessons because of a fear that it will spoil their hairstyles. And both sexes were scathing in the survey about the unfashionable PE uniform that had to be worn. The choice of sports available was also too limited. Teachers said they would like to see codes for sports kits relaxed, single sex physical education classes and a wider range of activities to combat the decline in activity.
Write the essay. (around 240 - 280 words)


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DIFFICULT TIMES FOR SPORTS AT SCHOOLS


Sports at school seem to be unappealing for most of teenagers at this day and age. This essay will explore into summarise and discuss two texts whose concern is how to make them young feel attracted to it and explore why they aren´t. (Keep intro short, 4 lines ideal) 

Tuesday, 9 October 2018

CAE Cambridge Exam: Proposal on Staff Morale

Картинки по запросу staff moraleHello Gustavo I send you my writing. If there is any problem I would be grateful if you let me know. 
Claustre

Thanking you in advance, 




Task type: Proposal (English level B2)




Question: You work in the sales department of a large company. You have been asked to reply to this memo from the company's Personnel Officer:

Internal Memo

From: Personnel Officer

To: Sales Department

Owing to recent changes within the company we are experiencing some problems with staff motivation. Please write a proposal giving your opinion of the following suggestions for improving staff morale:


  1. A party for the whole department.
  2. A weekend away for the most successful sales team.
  3. A monetary prize for the best salesperson.
I would appreciate any other suggestions.

Write the proposal to the Personnel Officer. (between 220-260 words)


Proposal on Staff Morale


This proposal is intended to highlight the current problem with staff motivation in our company and give provide some ideas on how to improve that issue.

STAFF MOTIVATION PROBLEMS
Add a paragraph here and explain what the problem is.

A PARTY FOR A WHOLE DEPARTMENT

I believe that could be a good option to improve relationships between people of different departments and consequently straighten up the link with all members of the company. Nevertheless, in an expensive option (check) although the results might be satisfactoy.

Tuesday, 4 September 2018

CPE Cambridge Exam: Report on a Jobs Fair

Hello Gustavo, This is another piece of writing I worked on. Thanks for your hard work and dedication! 

Writing Task: 
Resultado de imagen de job fair cartoon valenciaA job fair was recently held in your town for international organizations and companies to promote careers available for young people. You have been asked to write a report of the jobs fair for your college website. You should briefly describe the event and identify two or three promotions of particular interest and relevance. You should also evaluate the extent to which such events can open young people’s minds to new challenges and career opportunities. Write your report.

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Jobs fair in Valencia


Introduction
The aim of this report is to provide an overview of the jobs fair held in Valencia, as well as to identify the promotions of more relevance and discuss to what extend events such as this, can benefit students in our college.  

Overview and best promotions
Multiple international organizations met together at the Exhibition Centre last Saturday, September 1. Around 2,000 students from the region attended this annual event. Many programs were launched in this edition, with two of them clearly standing out.

Monday, 3 September 2018

CPE Spain 2018 Writing Sample and feedback


Hello Gustavo, 

First, thanks for sharing such wise information on your blog. I will soon take the English C2 test on writing as it was the only part I failed back in May. I would like this piece of writing to be checked if possible. 


Resultado de imagen de couch potatoWriting task: You have recently read an article from a youth magazine on the problem of inactivity in young people. The magazine has invited its readers to respond to the topic by writing a short article of their own, which answers the following questions:
Why are our young people becoming 'couch potatoes', and what can we do to solve the problem?
And this is my article!
Thanks in advance, N. B

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Millennial’s indoor syndrome” on the verge of becoming the newest disease concern of our time   

(title too long??)

“I have to do something about this. I can only think of playing on-line games and binge-watching the latest released series on Netflix. and I can already acknowledge that my sedentary beacon of living way of life is simply not right”, says Juan Manuel, a 17 year old from Madrid, who was recently diagnosed with severe overweight. Juan Manuel’s unpleasant experience is becoming less anecdotal as health pundits have already raised a red flag alerting of what is been being called “Millennial’s indoor syndrome”.