CPE Sample on Consumerism und Evolving Technology

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CONSUMERISM AND EVOLVING TECHNOLOGY

The first text points out the great deal of stuff being thrown away every week; as a matter of fact, Both governments and private citizens are trying to do their best to enhance recycling. This line of reasoning should not make us safe and thoroughly We should not be so proud though, insofar as this seems not to be enough to prevent situations like marine life from being irreversibly endangered. (Re-write + Add a couple of lines including personal opinion)

In contrast, The second text highlights the catastrophic effects of the fast pace of technological change, according to which we normally go on being subdued to keeping fact that we keep electronic devices only for a short time. urthermore, notwithstang their quality standards we seem to sometimes neglect, we merely rely on flattering Advertising messages compell us to discard our present gadgets in favour of the latest ones. To a certain extent, remaining backward turns out to be the greatest shortcoming to be feared by anyone nowadays. (Re-write + Add  a couple of lines including personal opinion)

Both texts describe the most devastating effects of consumerism, which is utterly affecting the environment because of the huge amount of waste produced. In conclusion, mass consumerism should, therefore, be legally discouraged in favour of the implementation of mental independence of clichés (?? ), as well as of the hyperconditioning and tantalising power of advertising which underlies wild consumerism.  

Annamaria D’Anna