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Wednesday, 22 February 2017
CPE Letter to the Editor Correction
Hola, he leído en vuestra web que ayudáis a corregir writings, lo cual me alegra, porque quiero sacarme el c2 y al trabajar no tengo tiempo de ir a una academia, y claro necesito una ayuda con la parte del writings para saber cómo lo estoy haciendo. Espero q me podáis ayudar. saludos!!!
Task: you have recently become aware of a situation
which you believe to be wrong or unjust and which you think should be dealt
with by the authorities.Write a letter to a newspaper clearly describing that situation ,explaining the problems it
causes and saying what you believe should be done about it:
Dear Sir or Madam,
bullying is increasingly affecting more and more schools. I currently work as a
teacher at St Patirck’s school, and sadly I have to witness situations of
bullying almost every day. This unfair and dramatic situation urge to be
sttoped, otherwise it will get more and
more complicated. (Feedback: avoid repeating words)
my workmates My colleagues and I have reported this issues to
the school’s direction, and they transmitted to informed us that the situation is in the
hands of the main authorities, which is a good sign, as it means that the problem is being revisedreviewed. However, the
process is taken taking too long and time is very important in this situation as the
health of the affected students is under threat both, physically and psycologically.
So, in the meantime we consider that
something else should be done from the school’s direction, in order to reduce the
amount of children being disturbed.
first started working here, clearly the situation was in control, it could be
maybe there were one or maybe two incidents per month which were dealt successfully with
the help of psycologists. Now, after
one year, the number has increased alarmingly, and the situation is out of
control, there is just one psycologist for the whole school, which used to be
enough when everthing was under control ,but now, obviously externalhelp is needed, for instance, more psycologists
and more supervision on the abusers. We, as teachers have been asked to keep an
eye with on the problem,but they have to consider that we can not continuously
interrupt the classes as the lessons need to be carry on.
It would be
greateful if this letter could be
published on your newspaper with the aim of make making the readers aware of it, and hopefully accelerate
the authorities´ work in this worrying social phenomenom.
- The most important one is probably to avoid repeating words. It shows that you lack vocabulary and that you don´t proofread.
-Another thing to consider is the number of words. Which is not stated in the task.
Apart from that well done and keep the good work !