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Monday, 2 July 2018
Discursive essay CPE 2018 sample and feedback
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have said state that
‘quality of life’ involves different matters, being health on the top of the
list. On the one hand, there are aspects which can be modified by us such as our
job satisfaction or our social life. On the other hand, there are other
conditions which are not under one’s control like politics or the weather.
Nevertheless, all of them agree on the fact that as long as a person is healthy
and surrounded by people who love them, they can have a good quality of life.
According to the first passage, it is unlikely that an individual’s life is perfect in all aspects but if someone is mentally and physically healthy has the power of happiness in their hands due to this will allow them to keep a job and have an active community life. (Sentence is too long). Unluckily, there are people who live in a country without political freedom or awful weather and they cannot do anything about it.
The second text raises the issue of the influence
of media may have on us. Some magazine s articles insist on showing us
which cities are the best to live in and which ones have the best climate.
Unfortunately, for most of us it is difficult to move to another city for
random reasons. (Not sure what you mean by "for random reasons")
General feedback: I appreciate how the text is organised in 4 paragraphs. I think the task was fulfilled but the vocabulary level needs to be improved to reach cpe level.