Hi Gustavo
Thanks for taking the time
to read this, Martina.
Writing Task:
A jobs fair was recently
held in your town for international organisations and companies to promote
careers available for young people. You have been asked to write a report of
the jobs fair for your college website. You should briefly describe the event
and identify two or three promotions of particular interest and relevance. You
should also evaluate the extent to which such events can open young people’s
minds to new challenges and career opportunities.
Write your report in
280-320 words.
Feedback in red
(I suggest writing a title)
Introduction:
The aim of this report is
to describe a jobs fair that was recently held in our town. As well as, to identifying interesting and relevant promotions made by the companies and
organisations; and to evaluateing whether the event opened the youngsters’ minds or
not. (who? in what way?)
Description of the event:
For the first time in a
while the jobs fair was held in the city. It was at the Town Hall, where there
is plenty of space to came out such a big event. (check!) The fair was well-organised;
there was a general topic per day, and each there were not only interactive
talks and presentations but also some engaging games. The general topics were
Physical science, Art, Medicine and Social science. For example, the first day,
Physical science, there were stands which presented different projects that
were done by students who had finished their career studies.
Promotions of interest:
All promotions were
particularly eye-catching but the one which kept me spellbound during all the
presentation was civil engineer. The announcer said such compelling words that
everyone was sure that is one of the best careers. Summarising, he said there
is a wide variety of job opportunities around the world, so you could also have
the chance to travel. Besides, it requires a lot of skills, what make the
career challenging. Furthermore, tourism manager was a protagonist during the
fair. It is a really strenuous job, which involves having a great deal of
general knowledge. Despite, you would be able to travel virtually all the world
as a lot of cultural knowledge is needed. (check!)
Evaluation of the benefits
of the event:
As far as I know, this kind
of event, whether they have a good organisation or not, are entirely beneficial
to the students; due to the fact that present careers which are not that common
and that students might not be aware of. Besides, some of the careers does take
a short time studying what it is important for some adolescents. Also, those
careers are much more challenging than the ones everybody knows.
Conclusion:
To sum up, it was not only
worthy to go to the event, but also a good movement made by our local
authorities as it is interesting and beneficial for the student´s life.
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