Thursday 2 August 2018

Writing a report for the CPE exam. Sample and feedback

Hi Gustavo
Thanks for taking the time to read this, Martina.

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Writing Task:
A jobs fair was recently held in your town for international organisations and companies to promote careers available for young people. You have been asked to write a report of the jobs fair for your college website. You should briefly describe the event and identify two or three promotions of particular interest and relevance. You should also evaluate the extent to which such events can open young people’s minds to new challenges and career opportunities.
Write your report in 280-320 words.

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(I suggest writing a title)



Introduction:
The aim of this report is to describe a jobs fair that was recently held in our town. As well as, to identifying interesting and relevant promotions made by the companies and organisations; and to evaluateing whether the event opened the youngsters’ minds or not. (who? in what way?)

Description of the event:
For the first time in a while the jobs fair was held in the city. It was at the Town Hall, where there is plenty of space to came out such a big event. (check!) The fair was well-organised; there was a general topic per day, and each there were not only interactive talks and presentations but also some engaging games. The general topics were Physical science, Art, Medicine and Social science. For example, the first day, Physical science, there were stands which presented different projects that were done by students who had finished their career studies.


Promotions of interest:
All promotions were particularly eye-catching but the one which kept me spellbound during all the presentation was civil engineer. The announcer said such compelling words that everyone was sure that is one of the best careers. Summarising, he said there is a wide variety of job opportunities around the world, so you could also have the chance to travel. Besides, it requires a lot of skills, what make the career challenging. Furthermore, tourism manager was a protagonist during the fair. It is a really strenuous job, which involves having a great deal of general knowledge. Despite, you would be able to travel virtually all the world as a lot of cultural knowledge is needed. (check!)

Evaluation of the benefits of the event:
As far as I know, this kind of event, whether they have a good organisation or not, are entirely beneficial to the students; due to the fact that present careers which are not that common and that students might not be aware of. Besides, some of the careers does take a short time studying what it is important for some adolescents. Also, those careers are much more challenging than the ones everybody knows.

Conclusion:
To sum up, it was not only worthy to go to the event, but also a good movement made by our local authorities as it is interesting and beneficial for the student´s life.



General feedback: 
Well-organised text. Task was fulfilled. 
Style is rather too informal, I would say. 
Check: vocabulary: use of "career"

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