Wednesday 20 February 2019

CPE Report on the Job Fair

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Writing task


A job fair was recently held in your town for international organizations and companies to promote careers available for young people. You have been asked to write a report of the jobs fair for your college website. You should briefly describe the event and identify two or three promotions of particular interest and relevance. You should also evaluate the extent to which such events can open young people’s minds to new challenges and career opportunities. Write your report.

                                                                                                                     Text submitted by Edoardo. 

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Report on the jobs fair in Fulham

Introduction
The aim of this report is to discuss the jobs fair that is yearly held in the Borough of Fulham, evaluating the important role it plays on young people’s career choices. (Intro is too short. I would erase the word "important" because it sounds like a conclusion)


The event
Following the task I was given by my college, I have written this report to bring into focus the main features of this acclaimed jobs fair which only came to an end last Saturday. The event was originally designed to tackle youth-related unemployment with the objective to bringing its percentage down to 23% in the next two years. Not only does it entail an assistance team which offers one-to-one consultation sessions with an expert during the week, but it also made arrangements for individual job interviews with well-known organisation chiefs who are intended to hire new teenagers. (Check grammar: with the objective to... )

Eye peak on the fair
The event offered multiple job opportunities in several sectors, ranging from the transportation to the marketing business. The food industry deserves a particular mention due to the enormous exhibitions regarding the history of the most common aliments and their production methods. The beauty field also offered one-day massage courses for aspiring aestheticians. Given the high quality standard of the jobs fair, I decided to attend it for a day and interview some of the visitors to ask for their opinion. What emerged from this survey is presented in the following paragraph.

Popularity of the jobs fair
Due to their limitative policy of job offers for the youth, most of the visitors turned out to be between the age of 18 and 25. Nonetheless, a remarkable figure of younger people were present that day, claiming their high interest in discovering more about employment orientation and upcoming careers. Most of the interviewees stated to have changed their views on the job world thanks to the event, however a small number of them made complaints about the numerous crowd which impeeded a smooth flow of people at times.(I would change the title for "survey on popularity of the job fair")

Conclusion
Clearly, such events draw the young public’s attention, which is more and more on their first job opportunities that will guide them into the professional world, and due to the positive feedback of the fair, I would recommend its reiteration in the coming years. (I would not use the word "clearly". Check the first and second lines, they don't make much sense).


Edoardo

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